There is probably some good song writing in here... Somewhere... But I certainly can't hear it.

Tip #1: get better sound equipment, don't record this song with your early 2000s Nokia phone.

Tip #2: Yeah, that's about all I got, the song would definitely be actually listenable if you did pretty much any kind of recording, but you seemingly did it all with an old phone or something.

I know this is like, punk, but like, any type of recording would be nice. Like, any.

There would be probably a decent punk band in there somewhere if you got better recording software but for now it's a low score.

It's a pretty good song, but the mixing is fairly bad, reminds me a bit of Ocularnebula.

The start is pretty good but the bass drum is fairly unfitting, also the voice-sounding synth at 00:15 is loud going in, things need to be toned down a bit, things need to generally be changed up. The song also sounds fairly mono when it comes to drums, very little effects on the drums making it sound a little like an early techno song.

Around 00:23 is some fairly good mixing other than generally the voice-sounding synth being too loud, having too much of a presence, needs to be toned down by quite a lot.

At about 00:48 is really good, not much to complain about, the song should be generally mixed like that, but maybe around here the hihats should be turned down a bit,

The drums at the end are really fitting, and really fit the end. However, the weird reverb/high pass on the gameboy synth doesn't sound very good.

I also noticed at 00:42 the hihats seemingly either get louder or transition to a different sample entirely, it's a little hard to notice but I certainly did, sounds a little jarring.

Minor moments of just things getting a little too loud all around, should maybe work on that a bit.

The track also just simply doesn't loop very well, it doesn't feel like a clean loop, don't know if that's a mistake or not.

The structuring, and melodies are overall just really good though, really shines in the melody/songwriting department honestly, other than being loud at times it's just a really well-written song.

Overall, a pretty good track other than the mixing, a lot of potential, will be following.